Backstage, GM Office

We are backstage in the hallway. We see the GM's office and two bodyguards
guarding the entrance.
(bodybuard1): This job is so boring ...
(bodyguard2): Yes, every time GM comes out and we ensure we are here. In this office there is nothing interesting ...
(BG1): A little it annoys me ... parents wanted me to be a doctor ...
(BG2): Haha! I always wanted to be a bodyguard, but I did not know
it's so boring work ...
(BG1): After today's show I go to a bar to drink. You go with me, Steve?
(BG2): Good idea ... what the hell is that?!

In the corridor goes wrong light. Repeated so several times.
(s1): They were able to finally do something with the lighting!
(s2): We do not have flashlights, even if the light broke, and it would be dark ... oh
I hate my life ...

Suddenly the light goes out. When the lights before the bodyguards standing very tall
and powerfully built man.
(s2): What's going on?!

First of bodyguards receives a hammer blow in your head and falls to the ground.
Bleeding heavily from his face and is unconscious.
A second security guard does not know what is happening. The man grabs it with two hands, raises and presses against the wall. Guard can not get free.
(PJ): ... fear ... it feels ... I see it in your eyes ...
(s2): What do you want from me? I did not do anything!
(PJ): Your fear gives me strength ... what I want? Suffering, pain ...
you said that you hate your life? I know how to change that ...
(s2): Please do not! Do not hurt me! I have a wife and children ...

Bodyguard starts screaming desperately for help. Jason is upset and began to
harder it simmer.
(PJ): Do not provoke me ... suffer ... now can only get worse ... but it will not kill you ...
Give the key to GM's office!
(s2): I do not have the key! Only GM has the key to this office!
(PJ): Your bad luck ...

Jason lets go of him. Protection of coughs. He grabs the door handle in August to get up.
Psycho scattering and implemented Sprear. They both fall into the GM's office.
Bodyguard felt this attack. Jason gets up and looks around the office.
(PJ): Hmmm ... this here is the most important office in the building? Poorly protected ...

Suddenly the guard turn the alarm. The siren located on the wall is very loud.
Jason is furious. He takes the computer and throws it in the alarm. The alarm goes off.
Psycho Jason goes to the security guard and attacks him with her fist.
It raises The Powerbomb and throws him in the GM's desk.
(PJ): Maybe this will teach you something!

Jason gets up. Cabinet rolls, jumps from the wall paintings. Revealed the entire wall located opposite the front door. Cuts his arm.
He then writes on the wall with his blood, "the dark era is coming ... Fear is Here"
When the ends out of the office.

Great Quality RP! Nice Job.

Pros
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- Great Storyline
- Great Idea
- Good Punctuation and Vocabulary.

Cons
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- Just needs to be spaced out and coloured.